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9 o'clock and
a nightingale song

clatters forth
from a starling winged night

in perfect mimickry.
The moon and her mandrake
baby screech whites,

peel trees to bone. Blacks
shiver down.
-
The stars meet
at hush- Deaf but eternal

jury.  Atlas, stung by

each daughter: a pinhole
truth, still  naively serene

after all they've seen: from dove breath
to flame.  All
   is a curse to the lampbearers.
-
O sleep,
The moon holds court.

Great judge, her metals bleed
into radiance, cleave twilight to hill.
She bobs socketless
through aether and flame, &
to her gleaming calm

all shadows die. No  illusions survive
but reflection, who steeps wood in
moonwhites, petrifying old life into
honesty.
-

Moon, chokered-pearl
holds voice at night's throat -

pulls light through sea's veins
and tightens light's  rope,

weaving candle across
the skyline to bless
something older than memory,
more tender than breath.
-
a will o wisp promise
severs reeds,  racehorse fragile. I search

this ending place
with ghost light,

it shakes above the water, for
even the doomed fear
the heaviness of clean.
i say poems because how neatly these fit together i am unsure of. but i love this one anyway.

might remove the section before last because it seems too strange set with these.

i love feedback.
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Nov 28, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations on the well-deserved DLD, lovely person! :clap:
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a-secret-key Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm so pleased, it was a great surprise :hug:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Dec 2, 2012   General Artist
Literary surprises are of the best kind, too :huggle:
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:icondoublethefun:
Wow. Your descriptions are unconventional and stunning! I would never think of some of the amazing comparisons you imagined. Amazing work <3
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a-secret-key Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm really pleased to hear that- I'm so familiar with my own head that it never feels fresh when I write it out, so I'm glad every time somebody makes a comment like that. :heart:
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:icondoublethefun:
hahah I completely understand :)
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:icondailylitdeviations:
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a-secret-key Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, thank you!
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:iconarchelyxs:
"Moon, chokered-pearl
holds voice at night's throat -

pulls light through sea's veins
and tightens light's rope,

weaving candle across
the skyline to bless
something older than memory,
more tender than breath."

This is really wow. I'm going out into the night now. I'm going to turn over the leaves until I find this. I need to find this. :heart:
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a-secret-key Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a lovely comment.

It's everywhere here, and I love it. :heart:
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